hey i like the feel.. its more of a song.. i can imagine it only with tune.. but i feel there are a few lines which sound incomplete.. rhyming always aint important.. make sure the feel jus flows through.. suddenly it seems its goin gr8.. and then there is this crack which stops the flow... but overall the feel is gr8.. nice thing to write about..i can get the situation clear... gr8 goin buddy..! let the ink not dry..!
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hey i like the feel.. its more of a song.. i can imagine it only with tune.. but i feel there are a few lines which sound incomplete.. rhyming always aint important.. make sure the feel jus flows through.. suddenly it seems its goin gr8.. and then there is this crack which stops the flow... but overall the feel is gr8.. nice thing to write about..i can get the situation clear... gr8 goin buddy..! let the ink not dry..!
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